Her hair freeze under the rain,
Glad she can still smile despite the pain.
Behind these oblivious gray sky
Is an impending whisper of good bye!
In this park where I first met her
Is where I always want to spend time with my love—
Not possible, I know…
Had to accept that fact despite the welling ache.
Under that cold sad rainy night,
I watch as her body fall on the wet ground.
As the last bubbles disappear in the air,
I whisper good bye with a tear unnoticeable under the rain.
makata talaga si mariz! :)
ReplyDeleteI felt as though this goodbye was forever. Your word choices were very well chosen.
ReplyDelete@foobarph: hehe thanks po for the comment! :)
ReplyDelete@Kay: thanks for taking your time in reading... :)
Sad yet beautiful !
ReplyDeleteprofound.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing.
profound.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing.
this is so sad and so beautiful it seems like a final good bye
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Mish: Thanks for dropping by! And thank you for taking up your time in reading this... xoxo
ReplyDeleteMorning: it's my endless pleasure...
Ann LeFlore: Yeah, it's their last goodbye!
Very sad, but well done!
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@Marbles in my pocket
ReplyDeleteThank you very much!
So sad and yet so beautiful, I loved this very much :)
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad, but there is some beautiful imagery here. Well done :-)
ReplyDelete@jeaniemcbain: thanks for appreciating the emotions I had put through this poem!
ReplyDelete@e.a.s demers: thanks for the flattery... God bless you!
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